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Fic: Untitled Drabble


This is my first attempt at writing a drabble, for the ar_drabbles challenge - "make us sniffle with a drabble set during or before the miniseries".

I don't know about sniffling, but it was interesting to try.

Word count: 100
Character: Laura, mention of Bill and Billy

Are you the lucky one? Not to be experiencing the gut-wrenching loss that you see, hear, feel all around you? It's just a dull ache now, not the searing grief or the numbness that is emanating from their very pores.

You're the lucky one. You won't experience this for long. The slow hopelessness will soon set in and drag them down. A few months, and it'll all be over for you.

But the look in Adama's eye when you catch him glancing at his boy. The bounce in Billy's step when he spots his girl.

You're not the lucky one.

Comments

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obsessive_a101
Jun. 20th, 2010 07:20 pm (UTC)
Love this. I absolutely adore it. It's interesting to study the dynamics of loss following the genocide for the characters, both those we got to know well, and those we didn't. :)

It's heartbreaking here because Laura had already lost so much, and yet, even with the apocalypse she continues losing (*sniffles about Billy and Elosha and Maya...*). :3 It's also interesting because of how different people viewed Laura's own reaction after the apocalypse - (to start again with a fic rec) here's an amazing little fic by lindsey_grissom that I'm not sure if you've read before: http://community.livejournal.com/timeenoughfor/31199.html#cutid1
lambrosia
Jul. 19th, 2012 08:35 pm (UTC)
Oh my, that was so sad! a lot of feelings in so little words. I agree with everything that obsessive_a101 expressed so well. The loss is just terrible, and here Laura is losing something that she doesn't even have (yet).
astreamofstars
Jul. 20th, 2012 12:49 pm (UTC)
Aw, thank you :) This was one of the very first things I ever wrote, so I wasn't really sure what I was doing, but I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
lambrosia
Jul. 20th, 2012 09:28 pm (UTC)
This is one of the first stories you wrote?! seriously impressed.
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